Some parents think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age. . Others think they should begin after 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Formal
education
is a crucial step in
childrens’
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educational life.
Accordingly
, it is
affairing
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affirming
affairs
by some people that it should start as soon as possible, whereas others claim that it should start after
age
7. From my point of view, it is more beneficial if
this
kind of
education
gets started after passing 7
years
old. It is asserted that starting
school
after
age
7 is more practical as
children
undergo less
stress
. Having finished the primary stages of
brain
advancement till 7
years
old,
child’s
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brain
is ready to start schooling .Needless to say that while a child is rising, their mind is passing the
process
in which visual, and comprehension level is developing.
This
process
is at its most level until the
age
7
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when a child can comprehend almost all aspects of lessons, so they will not have
stress
during formal
education
.
For instance
,
children
less
that
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than
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7
years
old at
school
can not comprehend lessons as they are complicated for their
brain
, and hard to analyse so they get
stress
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.
In addition
,
age
7 is the time when
children
are more independent. Compared to a3-5 year-old
children
, a
7 year old
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one has
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higher level of
independency
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, so the stage of starting
school
is easier since the child
do
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not ask for
parents
sitting
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beside them .If they were infants, they would ask for meeting
parents
all the time.
For instance
, in kindergarten
children
cry more asking to join their
parents
which
makes
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learning
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process
harder.
On the other hand
, some argue that it is better to start schooling at early
ages
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age
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due to faster learning speed in childhood.
In other words
, since childhood is a time when acquiring knowledge like learning a foreign language is faster (
brain
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has its highest performance), some
parents
prefer to start schooling in small
ages
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age
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to gain out of
this
golden period. It has
witnessed
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among small
children
who wanted to learn a new language, only after a few repetitions they can talk easily while older ones consider
this
process
as
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a hard way. In conclusion,
Although
it is believed by some people that starting
school
at early
ages
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age
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could be practical because of faster learning speed during childhood, the idea that having formal
education
after 7
years
old has better consequences because of less
stress
and independency of
children
.
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