In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case ? Do you think this a positive or negative situation ?

In the
first
place, owning a property creates a sense of permanence and stability
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house owners.
This
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allows owners to build connections with their
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they get a sense of community belonging. On top of that, buying a home is a great asset these days. The world population is much bigger now than it was in the past. More people means excessive demand for housing, and its prices rise.
For instance
, some people in Shanghai buy undervalued property, fix up, and sell it after a period of time for a profit. There are many reasons, if you ask me, why
this
situation has advantages. For one thing, there is a great amount of freedom to own a house or apartment. The owner has more privacy and power to make decisions. Importantly, he or she can renovate the place according to their needs and preferences.
In contrast
with the ented places, it is
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to make any changes to the property, and if tenants do, they get fines.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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