In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case ? Do you think this a positive or negative situation ?

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place, owning a property creates a sense of permanence and stability

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house owners.

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allows owners to build connections with their

neighbors

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they get a sense of community belonging. On top of that, buying a home is a great asset these days. The world population is much bigger now than it was in the past. More people means excessive demand for housing, and its prices rise.

For instance

, some people in Shanghai buy undervalued property, fix up, and sell it after a period of time for a profit. There are many reasons, if you ask me, why

this

situation has advantages. For one thing, there is a great amount of freedom to own a house or apartment. The owner has more privacy and power to make decisions. Importantly, he or she can renovate the place according to their needs and preferences.

In contrast

with the ented places, it is

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forbidden

to make any changes to the property, and if tenants do, they get fines.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

ownership
renting
importance
sense of security
stability
financial investment
asset
customize
decorate
belonging
community
potential
future generations
long-term
cost advantage
control
living space

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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case ? Do you think this a positive or negative situation ?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Rich people are getting richer, and poor people are getting poorer. The gap between rich and poor people is widening. What problems can the situation cause? What can be done to reduce this gap?

In the past, knowledge was stored in books. Today, people stored knowledge on the internet.

Some people think that too much attention and too many resources are given to the protection of wild animal and birds. Do you agree or disagree?

Some educationists think that international exchange visits will benefit the teenagers at the school. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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