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In today's job market it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applicants may not need any formal qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Landing a
job
 in a company needs knowledge and skills to carry out the task safely. In the upcoming years, I fully disagree that
job
 seekers are not required
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proper learning for them to be hired
instead
 workers direly needed it. I will explain in the ensuing paragraphs why I object to
this
 issue.
Firstly
, the theory is the backbone of obtaining ideas that professionals are required to obtain.
For instance
, health workers
such
 as nurses must necessarily graduate from a
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 curriculum to get a degree and pass the national nursing examination.
This
 is
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 significant factor for them to carry out and administer the right dosage of medicine to the correct patient since they learned
this
 information by context.
Secondly
, prior to
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 accepted in the aviation industry; a person must adhere to the safety and security of flying an aircraft by practising and studying the fundamentals of aeronautics, they need to comply with the qualification of educational background
that is
 successfully completed and free from alterations.
As a result
, they would be responsible for the safety and rendering high-quality service to the passengers. All individuals must acquire the formal education to perform the
job
 correctly like my neighbour who has been working as a seafarer. He commenced by obtaining a degree in marine engineering before applying for a
job
. His main
job
 description is repairing and maintaining the stability of the ship. Profound knowledge indeed is the major qualification
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 which every company base the applicant's mental capacity. In summary, practical skills might help an individual at work but cannot maintain the safety of a
job
. Learning by the book could be an aid to have a powerful mindset in facing arduous circumstances on the
job
 site that were hired based on their excellent transcript of records.
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