At the present time, the population of some countries includes relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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generation
has always been vital for all
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is more than
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one in the present. I am convinced that having more young
people
is beneficial for
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society
. On the positive side,
younger
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work
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better than old
people
. Needless to say that the younger a
generation
is , the better workforce it has. and
as a
result
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the
society
can develop in various fields ranging from sports to
economic
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. Take Portugal as an example, Ronaldo a football player who was a young guy started playing football and by his
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the name of his county has become famous, and almost
every one
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has known the country because of him. An example
for
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economic
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development of a country is China with a plethora of young
people
who are eager to work for long hours, and due to their effort China has become one of the
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countries for technology like digital devices like cellphones, so by selling more products the country has become rich and more level of wealth and ease can be witnessed among
folk
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of
this
nation.it plays a crucial in
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lives.
On the other hand
, the government of older
societies
does not need to dedicate
money
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education
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sector which can be extremely costly. Needless to say that having
young
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generation
, a plethora of
money
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their education from the very beginning day of school. Not only is
this
costly but
also
time catching, while in older
societies
it can be dedicated to other sections like sustainable designing to reduce needed energy
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instance, Germany has
majority
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of old
people
and put effort and
money
in
energy
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the energy
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sector, so
this
society
has developed significantly in
this
field. To conclude, positive sides of younger having better
work forces
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, and
a
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society
with
higher
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level of wealth, while older
societies
can dedicate
money
on
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other sectors and
develop
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. From my point of view,
younger
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the younger
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generation
is more fruitful.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • workforce
  • productivity
  • innovation
  • skilled labor
  • social development
  • technology
  • dividend
  • competition
  • resources
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  • healthcare
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