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At the present time, the population of some countries includes relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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 has always been vital for all
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.
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, the number of
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 is more than
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 one in the present. I am convinced that having more young
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. On the positive side,
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work
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 better than old
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. Needless to say that the younger a
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 is , the better workforce it has. and
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 the
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 can develop in various fields ranging from sports to
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. Take Portugal as an example, Ronaldo a football player who was a young guy started playing football and by his
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 the name of his county has become famous, and almost
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 has known the country because of him. An example
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economic
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 development of a country is China with a plethora of young
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 who are eager to work for long hours, and due to their effort China has become one of the
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 countries for technology like digital devices like cellphones, so by selling more products the country has become rich and more level of wealth and ease can be witnessed among
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 of
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 nation.it plays a crucial in
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 lives.
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 does not need to dedicate
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education
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 sector which can be extremely costly. Needless to say that having
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, a plethora of
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 their education from the very beginning day of school. Not only is
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 costly but
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 time catching, while in older
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 it can be dedicated to other sections like sustainable designing to reduce needed energy
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 of old
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 and put effort and
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 in
energy
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 sector, so
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society
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 has developed significantly in
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 field. To conclude, positive sides of younger having better
work forces
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, and
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society
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 with
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 level of wealth, while older
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 can dedicate
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 other sectors and
develop
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. From my point of view,
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the younger
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generation
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 is more fruitful.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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  • workforce
  • productivity
  • innovation
  • skilled labor
  • social development
  • technology
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  • resources
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  • instability
  • healthcare
  • elderly care
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