International travel is becoming cheaper, and more and more countries open their door and with more and more tourists. Do the advantages of increased tourism outweigh its disadvantages?

Nowadays, travelling overseas has become very economical and many countries are promoting
tourism
in their respective places to attract more
number of
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visitors. In my opine,
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aspects of
this
trend have precedence over the drawbacks.
Firstly
, the main advantage of promoting
tourism
is the boost in the economy of the nation.To illustrate, Dubai is one of the countries whose economy is largely dependent upon
tourism
. In
the
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recent studies, it has been found that
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economy has risen
threefolds
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as they have opened more wide pathways for enhancement of the
tourism
.
Secondly
, in the past years, international travel was meant for only well-off
people
. But, now due to reasonable prices, it is affordable even
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the
middle class
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people
of the society.
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instance
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in a recent survey, Thailand and Maldives have been found as the most popular holiday destinations because of cheaper airfare and affordable
accomodation
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accommodation
.
Hence
, now more individuals can travel abroad and they can enjoy
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tradition
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and
culture
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of other countries.
However
, there are certain drawbacks of international
tourism
also
such
as
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in the business of local shops and vendors. The
people
running these local markets are solely dependent on the income from their shops, for running their
household
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. So,
people
and government should be considerate
about
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these local markets
also
.
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, in India
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has started organising small fairs every year in different parts of
country
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, where these vendors can sell their products and gain
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amount of profit. To, conclude
although
there is
decline
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in
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of local market
people
but
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advantages of overseas
tourism
are more.
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Hence
I strongly believe that it should be promoted for the welfare of the nation as well as its citizens.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Economic boon
  • Cultural exchange
  • Infrastructure
  • Overcrowding
  • Environmental degradation
  • Cultural dilution
  • Economic dependency
  • Sustainable tourism
  • Revenue generation
  • Commercialization
  • Globalization
  • Preservation
  • Ecotourism
  • Quality of life
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