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Question: Some people believe they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #money #tax
In
this
 contemporary
ear
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,
tax
 is imposed by the government with the
guidence
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guidance
 of
professinals
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professionals
 and is being collected in every part of the world. A part of
a
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society believes that
money
 earned by them should be kept to themselves and should not contribute any
money
 to
tax
. I strongly disagree
to
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this
statment
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statement
 and let us discuss the possible outcomes and thoughts in the following essay.
Although
tax
 paying is very much important, most
people
 avoid paying and
hence
 use the
money
 for
betterment
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the betterment
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 of themselves. It is an individual's duty and
responsibilty
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responsibility
 to pay a set percentage of income in the form of
tax
. Many countries have different
percentage
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percentages
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 of
tax
 to be collected based on their income earned and spending capacity.
For instance
, According to
government
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the government
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 of India,
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a persons
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persons
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person's
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 income below 500,000/- is about 3% of
tax
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where as
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whereas
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people
 earning more
money
has
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have
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 a higher chance of paying
tax
.
Nevertheless
, paying
tax
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taxes
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 has been ignored by wealthy and
well educated
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well-educated
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people
.
This
 is mostly because
money
 earned by them is not basically contrasting with government policy and
this
 burden is paid by
middle
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the middle
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 class and lower earned
individual's
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individuals
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.
As not
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Not
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 paying of
tax
 will tend to
inflatation
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inflation
 and resulting to pay more than of asking price. Regular
payment
 of
tax
 can lead to much better infrastructures
such
 as better connectivity in roads,
advance
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 facility in
healthcare
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the healthcare
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 sector and
using
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 of better technology all these factors will lead contribute to a
nations
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 GDP (Gross Dometic Product). Tracking
tax
payment
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payments
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 using better technology by private and public
instutations
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institutions
 can lead to regular
payment
 in
tax
 and the ones ignoring should be punished and set an
examples
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example
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 for those who are unwilling to pay. To conclude, paying
tax
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taxes
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 is a right of
person
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the person
a person
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 who can contribute towards the better progress
towards
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of
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nation
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the nation
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 and
people
 ignoring
tax
payment
 should
be enlighten
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 about its importance
an
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and
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 brought to justice.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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