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Many parents are unhappy with their children playing violent games and watching violent movies. How it can effect children and what can be done to solve this problem?

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It is argued that violent games and movies can affect directly children's behaviour with negative results. Many
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 point. In
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 essay, the reason why negative effects can occur from violent entertainment and the solution will be provided. As young people have a high possibility to replicate those actions following the games and movies in real life because in
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 particular period, their learning process is highly developed and they can absorb the environment which could affect their attitude in advance ;
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, the game
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 renowned nowadays is GTA which influences players to perform anything they want and sometimes, they express their action in a violent way. Because of
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, it is not surprised why many
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 are concerned about the inappropriate media approach by their young people. Even though
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 is a huge concerning problem for adults, there are solutions that could change children's attention.
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 must understand their youngsters why have to play or watch those acts of violence.
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, Agreements which both sides are satisfied must be done;
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, let the children attend sports clubs
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 of staying only at home. As a recommended solution, the youngster is able to use their time to develop other skills ;
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 as social skills, physical skills, etc. rather than addicting to violent media. In short, playing and watching inappropriate games and films are problems that concerned
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 the youngster could learn the violence from the video game and replicate them in realism.
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,
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 must understand and find some other activities for them.
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