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It is generally believed that the internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The issue of searching for
data
 on
internet
-based has been controversial. Some people believe that the
internet
 is not an excellent
platform
 to search for
information
, whereas I agree with those who think that the
internet
 is one communication
platform
 which can be reliable. On the one hand, it is commonly believed that a lot of
information
 on the
internet
 is fake. One of the most important reasons is that the
internet
 is an open
platform
 that anyone can access since a huge amount of
data
 has been posted on without accurate resources or references.
For example
, according to the latest survey conducted by Bangkok University, it revealed that 80% of study reports of high school students in Bangkok who have proceeded by individual or group tend to have unreliable references from online access. Having said that, the
internet
 is not an excellent academic source.
On the other hand
, it seems to me that the
internet
 is the best searching machine and it
also
 is an excellent communication
platform
. The most significant reason is the fact that people can alternate the
information
 from a reliable source with their own knowledge. To illustrate
this
, in recent news, it has been reported that 80% of postgraduate research students tend to choose searching
data
 from trustworthy databases. I agree with
this
 point because the
internet
 enables finding
information
 easier, and faster and saves time. In conclusion, considering both sides of
this
 issue,
although
 there is a lot of untrustworthy
data
 on the
internet
, I agree with those who think that the
internet
 is the best place to find
information
,
however
, considering resources of
information
 must be done.
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