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Children engaged in sport are often overloaded with physical activity or get serious traumas. What are the main reasons of this? What solutions can you suggest?

#children #sport #activity #traumas
Major injuries can affect
children
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for
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 the excessive exercise to keep fit for
sport
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. I will analyse and discuss the main reasons and possible
solution
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 for it in detail
this
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 essay.
To begin
 with, there are two main reasons
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resulting
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the resulting
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 significant traumas in
sport
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children
.
Firstly
, competition is getting tougher and tougher in
sport
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sports
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 nowadays.
Children
 who take part in games struggle very hard to remain fit and active to compete with their opponents. For achieving success, they do too much physical activity that sometimes
result
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 in serious mental or physical injury.
Secondly
, teachers and parental pressure as they want their
children
 to be successful in all tournaments. Since both of them are the main influencers of
children
 so they follow their
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advice
advices
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 and suggestions.
However
,
children
 can be prevented by the help of media which is the best voice these days that everyone listens
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This
 is the most viable solution to raise awareness for preventing sports injuries in
children
.
For instance
,
the
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government sponsored
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 programmes for guardians and teachers on
televisions
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television
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 can encourage them to prevent their
children
fron
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from
traumatic
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having traumatic
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 injuries in aport. In conclusion,
media
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the media
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 should encourage
saftey
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safety
 measures in
sport
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sports
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 to prevent
children
 from
tramatic
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traumatic
sufferings
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suffering
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.
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