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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outwiegh the disadvantages?

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It is believed that learning a non-native
language
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 for
students
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 is a more useful start in primary
school
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 in comparison with secondary
school
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. From my perspective,
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 there are some problems with
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 view, the advantages outweigh them due to having a high ability to learn a foreign
language
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 at an early age. Primary
school
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students
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 are confronted with some obstacles during learning a foreign
language
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. As
children
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 spend their early years of education at primary
school
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, they might be perplexed when they learn their mother tongue and a foreign
one
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 simultaneously. Their brain would be under the pressure of learning different vocabularies for the same things in two languages.
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, the
students
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 are taught how to make sentences with the same meaning in the foreign
language
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 and their national
one
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. So they feel confused to switch continually between two languages, and they
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 may get disappointed with their performance through
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 process. In comparison, the
students
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 in secondary
school
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 have approximately overcome their national
language
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 in primary
school
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 and they are more prepared to learn a new
one
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.
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, the difficulties of
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 view have psychologically adverse effects on
children
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 rather than teenagers.
Children
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 are claimed to learn a non-native
language
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 easily and efficiently at an early age rather than those who begin it in secondary
school
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.
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, my niece who is living in Iran and is five years of age has learned to talk in English through watching American cartoons on a daily basis since 3 years old.
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 she is not able to read and write neither her mother tongue nor English
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one
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, she almost completely comprehends what the characters say. So
children
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 have a higher potential to learn a foreign
language
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 when they begin education in primary schools.
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, by teaching a non-native
language
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 to
children
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 from earlier ages, they could reach advanced levels sooner, which has many advantages,
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 as communicating with foreigners, being able to watch their films, read their books and papers to increase knowledge. In conclusion, in my opinion, learning a foreign
language
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 from primary
school
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 has many advantages, which outweigh its drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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