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Students leave high school without learning the way how to manage their money. What are the reasons and solutions for this issue.

#students #school #money
In
this
money
-minded world, it is the biggest issue. High school leavers are unable to use
money
 wisely. There are a few reasons for
this
 notion and can be tackled by some suggestions. Undoubtedly, giving more attention to getting high grades in exams.
This
 is because of complaints and pressure from parents, who desire a higher score and tend to only focus on academics , which has become the key reason for
this
 situation.
For example
, teachers give priority to core subjects
such
 as math ,science, and other subjects. It happens because they think that only study can develop them in all fields, like better job opportunities
as well as
 make them independent.
However
, if they do not learn how to save
money
,
then
 they can find trouble in their life  even if they do not respect
money
. Not only do they spend it on the wrong things, but it
also
 creates problems in those situations where they have to need
money
.  Having that said ,there are several measures that can be taken to teach the value of
money
 to students.The key step would be
educators
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 should include
money managing
Add a hyphen
money-managing
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 lessons into the school curriculum in the form of optional subjects.
This
 subject is about raising children 's perception of
money
 values
as well as
 various methods to balance their expenditure and income after leaving school and entering employment.
Hence
, gradually these habits and skills can control their spending and
team
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make
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 them use it wisely. In conclusion, there is no doubt that Less attention from parents and the education system is responsible for these issues ,
nevertheless
, They can be solved because of their valuable efforts.
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