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Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is commonly believed by certain individuals that
art
 is one of the critical learning areas for
students
 during their
school
 career.
However
, some people hold the opposite attitude toward
this
 because
art
 is not recognized as the subject that will show scores in their final semester when they apply for college and find a job. In my view,
art
 is a subject that we should learn at a young age and will positively influence our future and life. On the one hand,
students
 can develop critical thinking capability and imagination ability through learning
art
, which can install fundamental stone for them to learn other subjects in high
school
 and even college.
For example
, kids would own the ability to imagine and discover several methods in the
art
courses
, resulting in them discovering different types of methods when they faced difficulties from experiments or observations. What's more,
students
 would own the ability to focus on essential points and beauty that others ignore, so
that is
 why there were so many world-famous artists or writers who showed their abilities differ from others.
On the other hand
, it is admitted that most
art
courses
 were not recognized as the required
courses
 during their
students
' careers, which means
students
 will not receive direct benefit from learning
art
.
For instance
, though the teachers in primary
school
 and high
school
 encourage
students
 to participate in various after-
school
 activities and classes to enhance their knowledge when the national college entrance contest was coming, it is no doubt that teachers and parents would suggest that their kids suspend the
courses
 for the
art
 course was not belong to the limitation of the test.
Besides
, learning
art
 was expensive for
such
 learning needs a long time, and of course, it is no doubt that not each child has a talent in
art
. In conclusion, though kids will not receive direct and economic influence through the
art
 field, it is necessary to encourage
students
 to attend
art
 classes and suggest schools set
art
courses
 for it to remain a long-term benefit for individuals.
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