The mass media, including television, radio and newspapers, have a great influence in shaping people's ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers.

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might be affected
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the things that surrounded them from the beginning of their lives until the end. Mass communication is the major source that could deliver manifolds of information to the vast majority of people in every community. I fully agree that these ideas would play a vital role in
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of their beliefs and perceptions. These
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and printed text are
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source
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of information
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the current events in the
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. Whatever people
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and
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will sink into their minds and gradually shows off
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their articulation and actions.
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, children who are regularly exposed
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watches
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television
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a five-hour basis would absorb all the messages it conveys. By
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, youth will grow up and set their opinions based on the things they witnessed on television and read in the tabloid. A
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girl who spoke up like an excellent lawyer is one of the great examples
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, since she watches a prosecutor talking in a public regularly, those words would
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on
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his young mind and will be delivered spontaneously until she grows up.
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, she might end up as a lawyer. Those statement of elders coming out
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their mouth is entirely moulded in the area of their brain since their younger age. Radio is the mode of news broadcasting from the previous centuries which they keep tuning in daily.
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, a report of politics which
fabricatedly
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delivered by the anchorman
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understood by them because people trusted
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media.
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, it would affect their vote choices once an election
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in their province. Others are
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over out of those candidates they are rooting to place in the senate.
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, it influenced their mentality of choosing the
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individual to be voted
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Every
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and
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on the big screen that a child may face must be under the proper tutelage of parents for them to be guided of those misleading
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that may influence their entire psychological status. Mass communication is vital in our community, in
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a way for us to be properly informed. In summary,
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of media would immensely affect the
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perception
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how to stand on their opinion and how to choose a person.
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, it influences the entire well-being and mindset of a person.

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