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As the number of private cars has increased,so, too has the level pollution in many cities. what can be done to track all this increasing common problem?

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One of the most conspicuous trends pf today,s world is the colossal upsurge in the number of people who believe that the increasing number of cars in the city is the reason for the alarming rate of pollution. I totally agree with
this
 concern and it is causing a lot of diseases as well as problems in the world. Here, in
this
 essay, I will discuss a few solutions with the help of
this
thus
 problem can be controlled ate some extent. There is a widespread worry that
this
 will lead only to a myriad of concernment in everyone,s life as
this
 will be a major stress part for the government as well similarily of the public.
First
 of all, the government should take appropriate steps to tackle
this
 big issue, as per the beginning there should be a ban on unlimited cars for private owners,
as a result
, there will be a big help in the lack of big numbers of the automobile in the town.
For example
, Japan has introduced a few rules for buyers while buying motors, there are a few rules set to have a ride to limitations on auto and nobody can have more than one car in each house.
Moreover
, the government should provide the vehicles to the public at free cost so in
this
 case, people will lure to the public transport as compared to private if they will see the savings of cost.
Additionally
, the community should come forward to help the authority with
this
 big consideration which will cause future generations in the mean of diseases and global warming.
For instance
, my uncle is a nature-loving person so he did not allow everyone to have a car in his family members so he hired a driver who does drop and picked up everyone on time in
this
 case pollution and time-saving are always there with them. In conclusion. in the view of the arguments outlined above the public and the law both should be contributed to
this
 major care prohibition so they should hand to hand together to fight
this
 issue.
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