Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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sort of professional

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able to earn

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incredible

amount of money rather than other persons. Some believe

this

practice

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is unfair and should be changed;

however

, another thing

this

method should be kept existing.

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essay will explain both sides of the view in the coming paragraphs. On the one hand, some sport professional earn an incredible amount of

salary

. It is not just because they deserve

this

money but because other

people

love

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professional and famousness

also

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them to earn more. one obvious reason

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is they are doing sports and they help

people

to have a happy feeling. In fact, as they do important

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and

job

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therefore

, they have

right

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to get

this

salary

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that is

accepted in my country is the

salary

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players and

people

like to think about them.

On the other hand

everyoneone

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everyone

everyone one

deserves a justified condition and it is better they get

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pretty same amount of

salary

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is important with sports professionals too, they really should get

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same money as others. but

this

unfair world does not understand

this

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is based on reach culture and at the time

people

who work in other

feilds

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fields

need to get the same

salary

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all issue

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one and interestingly should be done with some

people

but it is not and

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is quite rare. In conclusion,

sports

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sportspeople

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people

get enough

salary

so why we should give them more

this

is not fair and have to be changed

otherwise

they will see the consequences.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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