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Artist need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artist should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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People believe
designers
 must have a boundary for their design, others argue that they should voice their thoughts freely.
This
 essay will explain why
designers
 should make their creations expressively.
Firstly
, limiting their creativity will not make the
art
 industry improve.
Secondly
, the artist considers boundaries as a standard,
hence
 their products tend to be patterned. All things considered, I am strongly convinced that the
designers
 must not have limitations.
Art
 requires a lot of thought to improve.
Therefore
, limiting them will suppress the designer’s ideas.
As a result
, the unique thoughts that come from expanding the idea will not be poured into their creations.
Moreover
, the designer's insight will be bounded
due to
 the limitation. As a matter of fact, earlier arts, especially in the nineteen century had an abstract design that made them indescribable until now.
For example
, The
Last
 Supper created by Leonardo Da Vinci in 1910 held many secrets that made people still crack those until now. Those are a source of reference for the modern arts that have been improved by some
designers
. As can be seen, the unlimited freedom design will become an insight for other
designers
, whether for the current time or for the future. The boundary is not only undeveloped ideas but
also
 will reduce the number of arts variations.
Although
, some believe that the
designers
 will find a way to make their designs unique.
Nevertheless
, artists complain about the limitation as it only makes their
art
 patterned. With attention to that, expert
designers
 compare recent drawings with the early-year model. The result shows that the old
art
 is significantly different from each other,
whereas
 the modern
art
 seems identical to each other. In fact, some of them have hollow meanings, making them unspecial.
For
this
 reason, limiting their creativity could lead to their works being unmeaningful, making their designs seem flat to the viewer.
Overall
, the bounded creativity makes the
art
 obsolete.
Additionally
, those boundaries could be set as a standard that will make their designs similar to each other, making them ordinary.
Thus
, I strongly disagree with limiting the expressiveness of an artist.
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While your main points are logically structured, smooth transitions between paragraphs could improve cohesion. Try using varied linking words and phrases to enhance the flow.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
You maintain a logical structure with clear, main points supported by relevant arguments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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