Some people think sending criminals to prison is not an effective way to deal with them. Education and training are better. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the civilization unprecedentedly advancing,a number of people recommend
criminals
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receive
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and training
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of staying in the
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a series of controversies.I am quite convinced that it is necessary for putting them into jail and
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or training only can play a supporting role. From my own perspective,a criminal must be sent to
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.If a person touches the law,he should have
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to reflect on what he has done and make an answer for his crimes;
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after he goes back to society,he will start a new life with an afraid mind law.But if only telling him which is right and which is wrong and giving a chance to be trained in a normal way,it has to be admitted that the method is almost useless for a person who ignores the law.In
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case,do you think that a crazy murderer
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as Peter William Sutcliffe or Jack the Ripper will be cleaned by a word and throw his knife away?So no matter how society develops,it is manifest that
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can not be replaced.
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,
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and training are a good way of guiding people but are not perfectly suitable for
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.I am quite convinced that why not setting an
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part and a training part in the
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.A case in point is the
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system in China.Most Chinese prisons provide a lawyer and vocational
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in
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’ daily
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even though they have regular
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to watch the news on television and
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provide regular
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to train the
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.In
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kind of
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,both mental and physical
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can be educated. To sum up,
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is a more realistic way for
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and
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and training are only daydreaming without reality.
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,I still sincerely hope a more advanced
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system can be created.
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