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These days some people spend a lot of money on tickets to go to sporting or events. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays many
people
 have been spending most of their hard-earned
money
 on various materialistic things one example of
this
 ticket for sporting and other events.
This
 is a growing concern as
people
 are not understanding the importance of
money
 in their lives and I strongly agree with
this
 notion and will hereby share my opinion towards it and propose some solutions as well . Sports have emerged drastically for many years. For, example the IPL matches going on in India has a huge fanbase which encourages
people
 all over the world to buy
tickets
 for the match and watch it in the stadium . But
this
 is not feasible for everyone as they cannot afford the ticket,
Also
 various events or fests are organised which require high fees to be paid,
people
 who are well off will be able to buy these
tickets
 but
this
 is not the case with middle-class
people
 .
This
 issue will continue to grow rapidly if young adults are not taught how to spend their
money
 in a more effective manner and on things that are necessary rather than
this
 . Yes , leisure time is important for everyone but one should not be fully engrossed in
this
 .,
Furthermore
this
 gives the sellers of
tickets
 quite a lot of
money
 . So to summarize
money
 can be spent on
tickets
 for sporting and other events but it should be done in a controlled manner.
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