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Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it should be stopped. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #growth #hunger #poverty #environment
Hunger and poverty are very serious problems
on
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 humanity. Some
people
 believe that economic growth will end these problems, others believe that as long as
ecenomy
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economy
grow
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, it would harm the environment. I am in
favor
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 of
second
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 statement. There are millions of
people
 living on
this
 planet and poverty is always the case that
people
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 been faced with. as long as
population
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 on earth increases, food and water supply wouldn't be enough. Because demand would go higher than expectancy. At
this
 point, government and
people
 should do the right investment to solve these problems. Other than that, rich
people
 will be richer and poor
people
 will be much more
misarable
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miserable
. While the authorities take action, they should consider about
environment
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. While they pick up the right investment, they should not harm the environment.
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