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These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work what could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

#fathers #home #care #children #mothers #work #development
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 recently, one of the confusing ones is that women are the now working and taking care of the bills while males taking care of
home
 chores and children.ln my opinion,
this
 is a negative development and l will discuss the possible reasons in
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 essay.
Firstly
, males are called leaders or
head
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 of the family, so it does not sound complete if they are not providing for the family .
For example
 , if a man does not have any income , it is not easy for him to be loved and respected by his family, but if he is providing and working, having an income
then
 that respect comes automatically. The reason that could be leading to
husband's
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 becoming stay
home
 parents could be lack of employment, lack of education and laziness.Recently it was scientifically proved that the female
gender
 hustles more than the male
gender
, women can do any type of work compared to the opposite
gender
 .For
intance
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instance
, females can do construction work, cleaning work ,
home based
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 care,
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electricity-related
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electricity
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and electricity
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 related jobs unlike males that have
less
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 job opportunities and they are very choosy. In conclusion, l believe that it is better for a man to take the lead at
home
 in order to gain the respect that they deserve, for a man to stay at
home
 takes his integrity away. Job opportunities for the male
gender
 must be created more as well to accommodate them.
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