These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work what could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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recently, one of the confusing ones is that women are the now working and taking care of the bills while males taking care of
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chores and children.ln my opinion,
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is a negative development and l will discuss the possible reasons in
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, males are called leaders or
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of the family, so it does not sound complete if they are not providing for the family .
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, if a man does not have any income , it is not easy for him to be loved and respected by his family, but if he is providing and working, having an income
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that respect comes automatically. The reason that could be leading to
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becoming stay
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parents could be lack of employment, lack of education and laziness.Recently it was scientifically proved that the female
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hustles more than the male
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, women can do any type of work compared to the opposite
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, females can do construction work, cleaning work ,
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related jobs unlike males that have
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job opportunities and they are very choosy. In conclusion, l believe that it is better for a man to take the lead at
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in order to gain the respect that they deserve, for a man to stay at
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takes his integrity away. Job opportunities for the male
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must be created more as well to accommodate them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breadwinner
  • caregiving
  • paternal leave
  • societal perceptions
  • gender roles
  • flexible working conditions
  • personal preference
  • father-child relationship
  • emotional and social development
  • household responsibilities
  • career opportunities
  • professional achievements
  • balanced parenting
  • earning potential
  • social stigma
  • societal pressure
  • discrimination
  • traditional mindsets
  • resentment
  • adjustment
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