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Band 4.5

In some countries, most people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of renting.

In recent years, an increasing number of communities are concerned about accommodation. The community hold different opinions in terms of the issue of whether the majority of
people
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 are fond of renting an apartment. I believe that the benefits of
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 its drawbacks. One of the reasons is that nowadays plenty of
people
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 can'
t
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 afford the expensive house
price
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prices
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especially
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, especially
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 youngsters, who occupy the most.
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,
due to
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 the limited
finance
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finances
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,
people
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 buy houses which are either big but old or cosy but tiny
reluctantly
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, reluctantly
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, which makes them unsatisfied.
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 renting a house is a useful way to tackle
this
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 dilemma,
providing
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it provides
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 a compromise scheme for those.
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,
people
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 living in a
renting
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 apartment can still enjoy the comfort and warmth of a
home
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 where they can kick back and relax as well. Apart from that, another benefit is that many families have to change their living places because of work or travel, resulting in renting an apartment being a very convenient and optional solution.
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, when they work in a new company which doesn'
t
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 throw away from their original accommodation,
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it can cause
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 a great deal of inconvenience for those commuters.
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, there is no denying that renting a
home
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 near the workplace is more available for workers
allowing
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 them to sleep more and not need to get up too early. It has to be admitted that living in a
home
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 rented sometimes contributes to a sense of unsafety for tenants, after all, it's a
home
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 that doesn'
t
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 belong to them.
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, it's inevitable that tenants can'
t
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 do whatever they want in case of destroying
the
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apply
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items
such
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 as furniture in the residence, or they have to compensate their landlords. In conclusion,
although
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 some communities hold that a rented house is unacceptable, I am still convinced that
this
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 is reasonable and applicable.

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task
Balance your view. State both good and bad points clearly and evenly.
tone
grammar
Check grammar and sentence form. Use simple, true sentences; avoid long, tangled parts.
content
The idea that renting can help many people is clear.
structure
The essay has a basic form with intro, body parts and conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rent
  • buy
  • home
  • house
  • owner
  • landlord
  • tenant
  • lease
  • contract
  • deposit
  • monthly
  • money
  • cost
  • price
  • loan
  • repair
  • fix
  • maintenance
  • move
  • stay
  • freedom
  • budget
  • plan
  • future
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • plus
  • minus
  • security
  • risks
  • rules
  • change
  • place
  • own
  • ownership
  • money
  • income
  • stay longer
  • stay short
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