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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
In
this
 contemporary world, advances in technology
has
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 changed enormously in human
life
.
Moreover
, nowadays, people have various access to get information and obtain products which help them to fulfil their needs and requirements
in
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everyday
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. Wherever availability of these kinds of resources make them
to
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acquire specific
item
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 by their
choices
.
Thus
, I will completely agree with
this
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 opinion
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this
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To begin
 with, modern machinery world ,
people
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 lifestyles are becoming
more and more easier
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easier and easier
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 than earlier. Wherever we have
chance
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 to obtain
such
 technological gadgets and tools which make our
life
 easier and safer with
variety
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 of our
choices
.
For example
, currently , customers are able to do their shopping through e-business platforms bloke e-bay, Amazon and Alibaba and these technical means have
abondond
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abandoned
 products
to
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 sale.
As a result
, by their own
choices
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 they always try to get good things by wasting their time on
this
.
In addition
, human beings have
opportunity
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 to achieve their educational qualifications through their
choices
. Wherever help of the technology,
pupil
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the pupil
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 has many
choices
 to get suitable educational tools which assist to improve their knowledge.
For instance
, when students hope to get
band
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 score
7
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of 7
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in
IELTS
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 exam, try to get fruitful
viedios
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videos
 from
YouTube
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the YouTube
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 platform.
Therefore
, children are able to get which are more effective for their learnings among others. In conclusion, in
this
 hectic
life
, people try to run with
this
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 pace of the world.
Furthermore
, they are able to get
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most valuable and productive outputs with their
choices
. Unless they have accessible tools, could not have space to make
choices
 in their
life
.
Consequently
,
by
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their
choices
 of making have
create
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satisfactory
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a satisfactory
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feeling
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feelings
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 as well as positive attitudes in their
life
.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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