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In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

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From
past
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 to today,
agriculture
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the agriculture
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 industry has achieved to gain important developments. Especially, in terms of efficiency, nearly an increase of 30% was recorded compared to
last
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 two decades. Despite all these positive sides,
hunger
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the hunger
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 issue plays a serious
problem
. According to
the
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scientific studies, almost 1/3 of the world is
to face
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 with insufficient feed. If it is focused on
main
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 point of
this
problem
, it seems that various factors, which
they
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drive
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a nutrition crisis
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global
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a global
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 scale, exist. Basically, these parameters can be divided into two groups
as
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environmental and unfairly resource distribution. To start with environmental
determinant
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determinants
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, human-induced global warming and its consequences affect
the
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land quality. What is more, as the ability
of producing
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to produce
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 food
of
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 the soil deteriorates, at the same level, huge losses emerge.
With
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 another perspective, it can be claimed that there is a direct correlation between the amount of yield and soil or land pollution. On the other side, resource sharing or distribution
vary
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 much more among countries.
For example
, While the developed countries have more
opportunites
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opportunities
 in investing
to
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agriculture
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the agriculture
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 sector, undeveloped regions of the world are deprived
from
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 these improvements. The distinctive factor
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here is
technology
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a technology
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 and financial situations. As long as
this
 gap between the developed and undeveloped regions increases,
hunger
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the hunger
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problem
execerbates
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exacerbates
exacerbated
. To solve
this
problem
, cooperation between countries is essential.
Also
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 all
technologic
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 and other
resource
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resources
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 should be shared as a whole between regions.
Besides
 these approaches, all types of activities made by human-being,
such
 as environmental
pollutions
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pollution
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, should be avoided. If all solution suggestions are implemented, it is clear that
hunger
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the hunger
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problem
 in the world will mitigate and people will reach more
nutritions
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nutrition
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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