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More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time. What problems does this cause? What do you think are some possible solutions?

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An increasing number of
people
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 from developing nations are making their
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 car a purchases. The principle
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 causes is traffic congestion and the most viable solution is better public transport. The primary dilemma developing countries face when their citizens start to buy cars is travel jams.
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 is because
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’s wealth has grown faster than the infrastructure and
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 means that
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 that were built for bikes or a limited number of cars are suddenly clogged with a line of vehicles during peak times. The result of
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 is
people
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 getting stuck in traffic for a prolonged period of time during rush hour.
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, most
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 in Ho Chi Minh City were built to carry bikes only, but now there are up to 5,000 new cars added to the streets a month and it now takes up to half an hour to travel one kilometre within the city centre. A solution to the
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 of overcrowding on the
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 is to build a sustainable public a transport system.
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 could solve the
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 by taking most
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 off the
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 and onto either an underground train or a train that runs above the road. As traffic problems increase, most
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 will become frustrated and decide to either sell their car or only use it when absolutely necessary.
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,
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 is why Ho Chi Minh City is currently building their
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 metro line and sky train, similar to Bangkok’s, and these are projected to reduce journey times by up to 50% when they are completed. In conclusion, the main
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 with the rise in the number of motor vehicles in developing countries is the clogging of the
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, but
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 can be addressed through modern public-transport infrastructure.
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