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Some people say it is more important to plant trees in towns and cities than to build housing. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some say that it is very important to build new
houses
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, some think that it is necessary to plant a lot of
trees
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. I agree with the second option that planting
trees
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 is important for our ecology. On the one hand, many
people
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 prefer to have many
houses
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 in their city to meet their housing needs. In their opinion, if beautiful and huge buildings are built in our cities, our cities will
also
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 develop, and all tourists will come to us. And I think that if the
houses
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 are built in the open areas, there will be a lot of problems,
for example
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, these
houses
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 will be very expensive.
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, these
people
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 encourage the use of open spaces as additional housing zones to close the gap in the market, and city officials convert many indoor open spaces and parks into residential projects.
On the other hand
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, planting
trees
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 in open areas has many advantages.
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when there are many
trees
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, these
trees
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 create a lot of oxygen and a comfortable environment for
people
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. So I think it is better to plant a tree than
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 huge building.
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, in my country, they only build buildings and cut down
trees
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. If a green area is opened for recreation, there are many
trees
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 and
people
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 can breathe fresh air. In conclusion,
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 some
people
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 still agree to build new buildings in open areas, I think that planting
trees
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 is very useful and will greatly increase our level of environmental friendliness.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Make sure to clearly introduce your main points in the introduction and summarize them effectively in the conclusion. This ensures that your essay has a logical structure that is easy to follow.
Task Response
To strengthen your argument, provide specific, detailed examples for each main point. This will make your reasoning more persuasive and relatable to the reader.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use logical connectors and transition words to link your ideas and paragraphs smoothly. This will help in maintaining the flow and clarity of your essay.
Task Response
Carefully address both views presented in the prompt before stating your own position. This demonstrates a thorough understanding of the issue and contributes to a more balanced and reasoned argument.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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