Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

Music
can bring
people
who differ in age, gender, or nationality to be together. I agree with
this
statement, and I will discuss my point of view in
this
essay. Nowadays, Korean boy bands and girl groups have many reputations worldwide. They have a fan from diverse countries;
for example
, Blackpink; the girl group has a member from Korea, Thai, and Australia too, and they can perform well together and have a unique talent;
moreover
, they have a fan from many places.
For example
, in their previous concert, It was very astonishing. I remember that I saw many
people
from various areas, Thai
people
and
people
from Japan, China, and German, at the show.
Moreover
,
people
who are not the same age can rejoin together because of
music
.
Music
can open every year even if it’s out of date;
for instance
, during the Christmas festival, many places or
people
are likely to open the song
such
as
Last
Christmas, Santa Claus is Coming to town or All I want for Christmas is you. For all of these songs, I can sing along with my parents, who are much older than me, even if my grandmother too. From my perspective, I strongly agree that
music
has a fascinated power to bring
people
together.
People
who come from different areas can be together because they have the same interesting things,
people
who have gap ages as well. The
music
can drag distances from age to be close by the lyrics and the melody they hear the same.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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