In some countries people who visit art galleries are reducing. What are the reasons for this? How can this problem be solved?

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in several museums and
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galleries
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have
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recent years. Whether charges
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amenities are acceptable or not captures the attention of the public. Personally, I think that the benefits of having admission
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in some
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museums greatly
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the detrimental effects that
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revenue brings. Paying admission
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to
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galleries
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is proven to boost the economy of a nation, especially in the rural areas wherein tourism is the main source of income. Arts play an important role in increasing tax revenues
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which a particular region
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. Once
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is earned by these
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, the government can
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provide
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other needs of the people
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as funding several amenities including healthcare
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and educational facilities. Indeed, paying
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can give a nation a boost not only in terms of tourism but
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in aiding the needs of
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society.
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, through
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fees
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, the
artists
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can earn money for a living. It is for certain that several
artists
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are struggling when it comes to financial stability; and
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, donating
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a masterpiece
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masterpiece
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is hard for their
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. If the museum's
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director,
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, is earning more money, there is a tendency that he will buy more artworks leading to financial stability for the
artists
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.
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, more
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will be persuaded to create more artworks due to an increase in their daily income. In conclusion, charging admission
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to museums and
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galleries
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is beneficial for a nation's economy and the artist's financial stability. In my view, through
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monopoly, the authorities can meet the needs of their people and can support the
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who are behind
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a masterpiece
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masterpiece
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, financial assistance is provided at both ends.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital era
  • online galleries
  • allure
  • economic factors
  • cultural pursuits
  • societal interests
  • innovative
  • engaging exhibitions
  • virtual reality (VR) experiences
  • accessible
  • contemporary
  • promote
  • art education
  • awareness
  • foster
  • appreciation
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