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Many people do not feel safe either when they are at home or go out. What are the reasons and what can be done to solve this problem?

It is true that mass media provides substantial
information
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 to society through newspapers and electronic
news
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 yet the validity of
this
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information
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 is doubtful. I believe that
people
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 should not have unflinching faith
on
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journalists
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, and an ideal correspondent should have many traits.
Although
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 journalism has delivered vast
information
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 to society,
people
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 should not totally believe the
information
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 or
news
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 published by
journalists
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. It goes without doubt that there is
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stiff competition among
journalists
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 to reach the best rating view or to be the fastest to provide
news
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. Because of the competition, they tend to do everything including manipulating the data to make the
information
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 sound more sensational. They usually deliver
information
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 as fast as they can without doing deep observation and
interview
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 to ensure the validity of the data. It results in the invalidity of the data and
information
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 they spread to
people
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. Every kind of profession requires certain qualities,
so
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 does journalism. The fundamental characteristics that
journalists
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 should have are being neutral and independent. They should be unbiased and should not take a side of any group. By doing so, they can cover both sides
while
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 looking at all angles of a phenomenon before presenting it
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 the
news
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 form.
Moreover
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, they should be independent from any pressure and interest of any group so they can be free to report any occurrence and fact as it is without
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 from any party.
To conclude
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, in my opinion,
people
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 should clarify the validity of
information
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 and should not totally trust what
journalists
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 report, and a good correspondent should have
independency
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 and neutrality in accomplishing his task.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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