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Some hold the view that ideas and information should be completely open, and there should be no control on what people can read and watch in the media (TV, newspaper, Internet) Do you agree with this view, or do you think that in some circumstances governments should limit the freedom of the media?

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There is a growing concern about mind
control
 through TV and mass
media
 these days. Many
people
 feel that there should not be any
control
 or censorship on information that
people
 receive, whereas there are others who argue that it would be beneficial if government
control
 the
media
 in some situations. I will discuss both sides of
this
 argument in
this
 essay and present my own opinion.
To begin
 with, those who are in favour of free
media
 believe that controlling news can be interpreted as disrespect to
people
. It is because they feel that
this
 act of government shows that it thinks
people
 are not wise enough to judge things on their own and
this
 action could be some kind of insult.
On the other hand
, it is argued by some that it is actually good to filter news on some occasions. They claim that,
for example
, when the government is dealing with serious cases of crime, the
media
 should not report every detail that the police have discovered as it can trigger the criminals so that they escape. Another example that they base their belief on might be the allegations of suspects within cases that are not fully inspected yet. Revealing these types of information could lead to misjudgment by the public and would threaten the social status of potentially innocent
people
. In conclusion, there have long been discussions on the freedom of
media
. Having looked at both sides of the argument, I would have to say that occasional
control
 of news in some cases will not be a problem if clear clarifications are presented afterwards once the dust settles.
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