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The best way to improve health is to do regular exercise. To what extend do you agree?

#health #exercise
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The most efficient way to develop and improve
health
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 is to
exercise
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 constantly. In my
opinion
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this
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 statement is not totally correct, even though daily
exercise
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 plays a crucial role in developing
health
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, there is another factor to consider, having a proper
diet
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 is as important as regular
exercise
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. Why eating healthy is so important? Food contains nutrients
neccessary
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necessary
 for the human organism to survive,
for
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instance
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 carbohydrates give us energy, proteins and lipids structure our cells and muscles,
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 it is important to eat the right
amout
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amount
 of each nutrient without exaggeration
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 our body will be unhealthy. If our
diet
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to
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 many aliments with a high content of sugar and fat, the risk of diabetes, ictus and
heart
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heat
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 stroke will be high. If someone wants to improve his
health
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 it is vital
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 consultation with a nutritionist, as
though
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apply
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he will be able to prescribe a
well balanced
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diet
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 and tell which kind of food must be avoided.
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Health
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Healthy
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 eating habits are
also
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 important to
exercise
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 daily, as
previusly
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previously
 mentioned, carbohydrates provide us energy, It is important to know how much amid has to be eaten in order to
exercise
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 without issues. In conclusion, the best method to increase
health
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 is to combine daily
exercise
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 with a properly balanced
diet
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 prescribed by a nutritionist.
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