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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #sense #competition #children #co-operate #adults
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believe
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believes
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 that creating
competitive
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a competitive
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 environment in
current
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the current
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scenaro
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scenario
 can be fruitful
to
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for
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 the growth of the kids.
However
, Some protagonists opine that mixing nature and sharing qualities are more vital to
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 maturely. I
particulary
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particularly
 think that Children must be nurtured with care and creating
competition
 among themselves can be deteriorated. At the outset, When the feeling of
competition
 is raised in
child
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a child
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, he/she feels stressed.
Tender
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The tender
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 mind of
child
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a child
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 can not tolerate that much pressure.
Although
 Healthy
competition
 can be encouraged.
For instance
,
instead
 of comparing who will come
first
 in
exam
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the exam
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, make
comparison
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a comparison
the comparison
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 in positive aspects like who has run more
kilometers
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 or who can avoid cheap meals for more duration. These things will create
positive
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a positive
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 impact
in
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on
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 children and will
also
 benefit them in several ways.
On the Contrary
, The Virtues like
co-operation
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cooperation
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,empathy,care,sympathy and compassion should be
tought
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taught
tough
sought
 to the toddlers. The concept of caring and sharing can be introduced to them.
Helping
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 each other develop magical
sense
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senses
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 among them, their bonds get stronger. In
their
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the
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future
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,future
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 they become
helpful
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a helpful
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 and caring
person
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people
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. Negative aspects like jealousy and disgust do not arise in them. To conclude,
Competition
 if healthy can be raised but not all the
times
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time
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.
On the other hand
, Aiding quality is more beneficial in children. I strongly condemn unhealthy
competition
 and favour
sense
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a sense
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 of co-operation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • compete
  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
  • empathy
  • social skills
  • reduce
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balanced
  • approach
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