In many countries paying things using mobile phone apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?
Nowadays, technology became an essential
things
in human life Correct the article-noun agreement
thing
such
as internet
and mobile phone. The majority of nations Correct article usage
the internet
purchasing
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purchase
stuffs
by Change the wording
stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
phones
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phone
such
as online banking and PayPal which is being normally now. In the
following graphs will be discussed in detail about advantages, before a conclusion is reached.
Change preposition
The
Firstly
, mobile phones are the things
that everyone should have which is having lots of features and benefits. Online banking is likely to use
more than afore. For example
, Almost every restaurant has an online payment to made
it easier for both Change the form of the verb
make
and
the owner. Correct word choice
apply
Moreover
, when we payment
the bill or the proof will automatically save Replace the word
pay
Correct pronoun usage
it in
in
your device. Change preposition
to
For instance
, if you making
Wrong verb form
make
incomes
and Fix the agreement mistake
income
Correct your spelling
expenses
expanses
, you will know where the money Correct your spelling
expenses
go
or if you Change the verb form
goes
having
a problem, you will have Wrong verb form
have
an evidence
.
Remove the article
evidence
a piece of evidence
a shred of evidence
In addition
, Now we are having a pandemic called COVID-19, people tend to touch less
so paying for Correct your spelling
touchless
things
online is become common and everyone should do
. Correct pronoun usage
itdo
For example
, some shops have a rule that clients could pay online by scanning the QR code only. They will not receive a
cash. Remove the article
apply
However
, there are some issues that happened. Such
as,
the thief who made fake bills and was given to the store or sometimes the bank is closed to improve a system which the applications cannot Remove the comma
apply
use
at that time. For example
, Banks usually closed during the day while sometimes they did not announce to let the users know.
In conclusion, online paying is risen to be common which is having lots of advantages. (Easily to use
, less touching, automatically saves in your device) that is
why technology became normal in the world but there are disadvantages. (Fake bills, improve system time). Therefore
, online things
has
to Change the verb form
have
use
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...