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Space exploration is much too expensive and the money should be spent on more important things. What is your opinion?

#space #exploration #money
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 has become a major discussion issue as it is massively expensive. In various circles, it is argued that the government ought to put
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 towards solving other more immediate issues. In my opinion,
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 is not worth the
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, and
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, the budget should be allotted to other severe problems. Many nations around the
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 suffer from pandemic poverty. These countries do not have sufficient resources to meet the needs of the population. In consequence, the government cannot even provide the population with basic needs.
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 budget can be re-allocated to help these nations overcome their poverty and enable their governments
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 on people’s quality of life.
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, illiteracy is another immediate global issue which few may disagree that
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needs to be addressed
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 and there, and it can be argued that it is more important, at least for the time being
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 than
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, many studies show that millions of
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struggles
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 to earn a living for themselves and their families due to their illiteracy problem. The latter pressing issue can be solved, If the affluent nations lend a hand
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 facilitating education in the poor regions.
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, it is to an extent acceptable to state that
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 is something which is not serious or of real value. Some countries do it in order to gain
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 edge over their counterparts.
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, there are far more crucial endeavours to fund,
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, the
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 of our own planet. The volcanic regions are not yet explored fully, as is Antarctica.
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, it can be argued that the knowledge available
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 our own planet is far
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 of spending
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 on than that of
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. To conclude, in my opinion,
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exploration
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 is nothing but wasting
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. Global issues
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 as poverty and illiteracy are far more rewarding to tackle, and we should explore our own planet before thinking
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exorbitant
  • myriad
  • pressing issues
  • allocated
  • advances
  • direct results
  • pave the way
  • uninhabitable
  • inspirational aspects
  • fuels innovation
  • shared goal
  • intellectual capital
  • budget overruns
  • tangible benefits
  • rationale
  • dedicating
  • returns on investment
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