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Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people while others believe that the purpose of museum is to educate. Discuss both views and give you own opinion.

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People
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 have different views about the role and function of
museums
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, whether those places should be enjoyable and entertaining or be educational places only. In my personal opinion,
museums
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 should be both a place to gain knowledge and enjoyable enough to attract the public’s interest. On the one hand, operating a museum just for sharing knowledge will not reach its purpose efficiently.
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, some
people
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 suggest making
museums
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 create events and plan projects through which
visitors
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 can learn about the history and enjoy those activities actively. Average
visitors
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 may get bored if they have to read or listen to too much educational content
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, thinking of education through enjoyable events can be more attractive to potential
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.
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, the management team could earn more funds and can invest them in maintaining and expansion of the museum.
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, some
people
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 argue that
museums
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 should only focus on their main function, sharing knowledge about historical and cultural
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.
Visitors
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 should be educated about the
things
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 that they did not know previously.
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, some experienced guides will explain to a group of
visitors
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 or offer leaflets and hangouts in which general information about the exhibition is written. In
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 way,
museums
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 can carry out their main task of teaching
people
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 about history, culture, and many other knowledgeable
things
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. In conclusion, it seems to me that a good museum should be able to offer an enjoyable and educational experience so that more
visitors
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 will come and learn new
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 while having fun at the same time.
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