Some people think that it is a good idea to give children a small amount of money each week to spend on what they would like.Other people think this is wrong and that it is a waste of money.Discuss both views and give your opinion

People
think
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give
money
to
children
to buy whatever they want to buy during the week. Others think
this
idea is wasting
money
on
children
. I totally agree with the
first
view which is giving
money
to
children
and buying stuff.
This
view has two benefits for parents and
children
.
First
of all, parents have to teach
children
to how to spend
money
. In most cases, it is not necessary to buy everything.
For example
, they want to buy a toy which is so popular among
children
. In
this
situation, if a child has that special toy, it could not allow giving that for playing. The
second
advantage of giving
money
to
children
is they can learn to keep their
money
in
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unnecessary situations. In my view,
this
advantage is so useful. Because while they are young, you know the skill of earning capital, lending salary to others and, spending cash. As I experienced before, when I was a six-year-old girl, my parents give me some pay to buy an ice cream or chocolate from the nearest market where I lived there
that
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was liked so much. At that time, I learned to calculate
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bill
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and how much I have to give back. In conclusion, two groups of people have different views that are giving
money
to
children
is good or wasting capital. As I mentioned in the two previous paragraphs, offspring get new experiences and skills by giving cash.
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