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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding changes. Others, However, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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In
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 day and age, in our
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, we have to face many difficult problems and decisions. Some
people
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 think that they should live to do the same
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 and avoid tough decisions.
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, others prefer to live with challenges and under pressure.
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, in my opinion, I prefer to live a difficult
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 than do the same
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 all over again. Several
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 argue that they prefer to live a
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 in a trivial routine.
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 who love their normal
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 do not want to change their
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 routines or methods.
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,
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 like
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 often create for themselves a comfort zone which can have many rules that they should not break. To explain
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, these
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 are afraid if these mentioned rules got broken, their
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 would be much more difficult.
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, their
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 would be so boring and maybe when they got old, they would regret it.
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,
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 who love challenges often risk their
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 to get some significant reward or to help them improve their skills and knowledge.
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, various
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 who love to change their job frequently, want to try every kind of office environment, and contact with many kinds of personalities or difficulties. So that they can choose which job suits them best.
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, a number of
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 who do not like normal
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such
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 as going to the workplace or office every day, try to complete some challenges.
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, travelling or mountain climbing is one of the best
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 that challenge lovers to want to do
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 since they want to bypass their fear and experience new cultures or meet new
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.
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, they will not feel bored in
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. In conclusion, some
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 prefer to spend their
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 doing the same routine all over again. In my perspective,
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 should try new
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 to make their
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 much more exciting and
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 can help them not to fall behind in our society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • mastery
  • innovation
  • adaptability
  • personal growth
  • resilience
  • hesitancy
  • risk-taking
  • transitions
  • enrichment
  • equilibrium
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