2 The education of young people is highly prioritized in many countries. However, educating adults who cannot write or read is even more important and governments should spend more money on this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

They say
education
is the key to success.ln many countries, educating younger people is a number one priority
however
it is argued that it is
also
important to educate
adults
who are unable to read or write and the state must spend
money
on them.l moderately agree with
this
statement.
This
essay will discuss why l do not fully support the idea. On the
first
hand,
education
will remain the key to unlocked doors so
then
it is of utmost importance that it is prioritized for the future generation. Spending loads of
money
on children
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for example
, giving them free
education
will reduce the number of illiterate
adults
,
therefore
, they won't be any need for adult
education
.
This
concludes my point on why I do not agree with the point
if
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spending lots of
money
on adult
education
.
On the other hand
, spending
money
on adult
education
is a backward development
although
it will assist them with the critical skills, The government will spend
huge
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amount of time and resources because it takes more time and energy to literate an older person compared to the younger one.
For example
, it is proven scientifically that the brains of children are
more
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spongier than
older
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the older
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generation
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they can absorb different things in a short period of time. Learning to a child is more interesting than to
adults
. To sum up, looking at the points discussed, it is more advantageous to promote and prioritize
education
to
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younger children
instead
of
adults
.
This
will help to reduce the rate of illiterate aged people.
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  • literacy programs
  • functional illiteracy
  • social mobility
  • inter-generational poverty
  • workforce development
  • economic growth
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