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Nowadays, in many countries chemicals are used to produce and preserve food. Are the advantages of this use overweigh the disadvantages?

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Up to now,
chemicals
 are widely used for
food
 preservation and
production
 in many
countries
.
However
, in my view, it brings more drawbacks than positive sides.
First
 of all, fertilizers and pesticides that are used in agriculture, influence the quality of
products
 that might be hazardous to people's health. If we take China as an example,
this
 country takes one of the top places in terms of the
production
 of vegetables in the world.
However
, the high volume of the
products
 is caused by the wide usage of
chemicals
 that preserve the
food
.
Thus
, since the quantity is high, the quality of
products
 leaves much to be desired.
Therefore
, as many people consume
such
food
, they may face health issues, and
as a result
, the consumption of these vegetables will be pointless.
Secondly
, with the popularity of the
food
 that was produced by the means of pesticides, the manufacturing of contaminated
chemicals
 increases the pollution of the environment. Since the demand for fertilizers becomes higher, many factories start rising their
production
 volume.
However
, due to the fact that the exhausted gases come out, the air gets polluted.
For example
, in Russia, there are numerous factories that produce
food
chemicals
, and the life in the vicinity becomes very dangerous due to the high volume of air contamination. Still, one benefit of chemical usage can be pointed out. The preservation of
food
 for a longer period can cope with
such
 problems as famine in
such
 developing
countries
 as Africa. Since these
products
 can be delivered free to other
countries
 and keep the freshness, people who suffer from hunger are able to get
food
. The availability of the
products
 has helped many nations in poor
countries
. Overall, despite the fact that the usage of
chemicals
 in
food
production
 and preservation has become widely spread, and has solved the famine issues in a number of
countries
, I believe that society should decrease the
production
 of fertilizers and pesticides. To my mind, health and ecology should take the
first
 place in human lives.
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