Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The lifespans of modern individuals have improved, and these can be attributed to advancements in healthcare and

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environment. Whether or not to prolong their working lifespan,

however

, will require an in-depth discussion. Personally, I believe that the time for

retirement

should be individualised, giving our seniors

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freedom to continue working if they wish,

instead

of mandating

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age

for

retirement

, which may

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do more harm than good.

First

and foremost, pushing back the

age

for

retirement

can cause burnout and exhaustion for many employees.

Although

more experienced employees can perform the duty better than a junior colleague, it is easy to see that a worker labouring for over thirty years will be burnout and tired. Seniors are more prone to minor health issues and concentration issues, which will, in turn, reduce

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of the company.

Thus

, in a nutshell, a timely

retirement

will be a relief for the individual, the company and

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society.

Furthermore

, by allowing people to retire earlier, more resources are made available. Upon

retirement

, promotion within the company is accelerated and more job opportunities

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possible for new graduates and

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society. Older people can have more freedom to develop their hobbies or join voluntary work, which can bring about satisfaction and

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of self-control. Compared with those who work after

retirement

, aged residents have a higher level of life satisfaction and happiness.

In addition

, elders can spend more time with their families to encourage bonding and spare the parents time for career development.

Therefore

, my view of not raising the

age

of

retirement

is convincingly justified. To conclude, I see that there are potent pieces of evidence to support my

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argument

,

hence

supporting the view of keeping the

age

of

retirement

as it is, rather than a mandatory delay in

retirement

age

.