More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution.

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vehicle
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as their principal communication.
This
essay will discuss the problems associated with
this
and
also
describe some possible solutions to avoid
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them
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. The main
problem
caused by using
private
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a private
the private
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car
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is
to create
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a
lot
of
jam
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in
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the
road
. It is perused that the
car
is increasing day by day. Comparatively,
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is not
enhancing
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everyday
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. They are fashioning a
lot
of que systems.
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it is seen that most of the
vehicles
cannot move from one place to another area due to a
lot
of pending aspects. Trafic is spreading heavily and
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nobody
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no body
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nobody
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cannot remove it.
Thus
, the area is creating hinder to every
people
. The possible solution is to create a restriction on
car
moving. There might be a limited number of cars accessing
on
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the path.
For instance
, everybody uses private
vehicles
and they create a
lot
of
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on the
road
. If there is a
road
restricted
sytem
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system
, the traffic jam
problem
would not occur.
Moreover
, there must be creating some tax on
vehicles
so that
people
can avoid
from
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it. It can enable
people
to go anywhere
by
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foot.
Also
, some kind of public transportation should be used to solve
this
problem
.
For example
, the bus carries a
lot
of
people
and if it
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in the city there might be a
reducing
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of traffic
jam
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jams
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which can enable
pedestrian
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pedestrians
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to move freely on the
road
. In conclusion, private
car
causes a
lot
of
problem
to
restict
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restrict
people
on the
road
. The possible solution is that create a limitation
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use
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native
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vehicles
.
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