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Women can do everything that men can and they even do it better. They also can do many things that men cannot. But it is a fact that their work is not appreciated as much as men's, although they have to sacrifice a lot for their family and career. It is said: "A woman's place is in the home." What do you think?

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Some people argue that
women
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 are equally capable in each activity as
men
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.
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, they are able to cope with issues,
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but men
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 cannot. Others share a different opinion, that
women
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 should stay at home.
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, unfortunately, their
work
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 seems to be less valuable in comparison with
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´s and
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 I am going to give my own opinion. I agree that
women
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 have the same abilities as
men
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 do, at least in the majority of activities or occupations. It can not be denied that
women
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 are equally capable in comparison with
men
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, if not more for the particular occupations. One of
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 is that they may be more precise and organized in some white-collar
jobs
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as a result
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 of the management of households and children.
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,
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´s necessity to deal with more things in comparison with
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,
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 might be the source of the enhanced
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 system which is suitable
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 CEOs or teachers. Later on, I believe, that
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 shift in the ideology of the appreciation of
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´s
work
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, is fortunately happening, if it is not already completely achieved. From the other point of view,
men
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's gender is physically stronger and
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 there are some activities and occupations, which are
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 better.
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, sports results reached by
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 are far beyond
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´s physical gifts. Regarding
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, blue-collar
jobs
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 are generally more for
men
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.
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, letting
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 practice hard manual labour may be a source of insufficient results and presumably some serious health issues. To conclude, from the aforementioned arguments, doubtlessly,
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 have the same abilities to perform a vast number of
jobs
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 as
men
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 do.
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, there are some
jobs
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, which are more suitable for
men
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.
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