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In some countries it is becoming increasingly common for people to follow vegetarian diets. Do the advantages of this outweighs the disadvantages.

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Nowadays Vegetarian
diet
 has become a common phenomenon across some parts of the world. There are some advantages & disadvantages
for
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vegetarian
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a vegetarian
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diet
 which are discussed
further
 in the below paragraphs. One of the
reason
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 why
vegetarian
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a vegetarian
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diet
 is followed across some regions is that people nowadays are animal lovers &
dont
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don't
 usually prefer meat.
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, it is difficult for me to eat
non vegetarian
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non-vegetarian
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 food as
i
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 have
myself
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been an animal lover since childhood. Another important factor for considering the vegetarian
diet
 is to avoid any
health related
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 issues caused by consuming infectious
meatmeat
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meat meat
.
On the other hand
 , there are
few
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 disadvantages
for
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 vegetarian food which
includes
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include
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 a
protein
deficiet
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deficient
deficit
diet
.
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A non
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Non vegetarian
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diet
 has
good
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a good
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 amount of
protein
 content & other important
sourceof
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source of
vitamins
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 like vitamin B12 , omega3 etc. In my
opinion
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plant based
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plant-based
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diet
 outweighs
non vegetarian
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non-vegetarian
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diet
 as the probability of having diseases from animal meat like swine flu,
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 flu will reduce,
Also
 including
lot
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 of vegetables in
diet
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the diet
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 can increase fibre intake in the body & will keep us active
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throughout
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through out
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throughout
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 the day. We can use
other source
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 of
protein
 in
Vegetarian
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the Vegetarian
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diet
 like the paneer or soya replacing the meat which will
also
 ensure
protein
 intake is sufficient in the body. To conclude, both the diets have their advantages & disadvantages but vegetarian
diet
 due to its health benefits is nowadays considered to be more commonly
practiced
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 across some countries.
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