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Memorising facts is the most important way to succeed in education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#facts #education
Nowadays,
people
 who succeed in
education
 are very important
for
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 society because we are in
the
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a
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 world that needs development
in
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every
second
.
However
, to succeed in
education
 is not easy because
it
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one
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 has to combine
experiences
 and memories together to be successful
people
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person
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. In the following paragraphs, my supportive reasons of memories are the most important skill to be successful
people
 in
education
 will be outlined. The successful
people
 in
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education
educcation
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 system have to study hard to earn their knowledge,
then
 they combine their
experiences
 with their knowledge to produce the information and
annouce
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announce
 to
public
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 to make them provide benefits to the world. The thing that
call
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experiences
 of successful
people
come
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 from using their
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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in
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many times after that they know how to use which solutions to solve which problem. In conclusion,
experiences
 come from
repeat
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a repeat
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 of using facts that they can memorize. So, memorizing facts
are
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is
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 the most important skill to be successful
people
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person
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 in
education
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the education
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 system.
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