In many countries, international tourism has become an important source of income. However, it also has negative effects. Do the benefits of international tourism outweigh the disadvantages?

Many
people
want to travel aboard because they want to see other
culture
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except their own. So, many countries around the world have many
tourists
in one year and that can be significant income for their
country
.
However
more
people
create more
problems
. In the following
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adventages
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advantages
and
disadventages
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disadvantages
will be outlined in
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.
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one
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hand, many international
tourists
can create
problems
from the cultural diversity
to
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local
people
because they have different
culture
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cultures
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, with
this
point local
people
will not like or hate the
tourists
and create following
problems
.
Moreover
, each
country
has different laws and some tourist
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not follows
law
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of
visiting
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country
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,
then
they do illegal things and cause
following
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problems
.
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the other hand, many
tourists
mean more income for
country
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because something is new for their
tourists
, and they want to try it or buy it,
that
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means it can
creates
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lots of money around the
country
.
Moreover
, some
country
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countries
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want to create more
convinence
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convenience
conference
facilities for their
tourists
, so they build something to develop
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a country
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country
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that can make their
tourists
more
convinence
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convenience
and the
country
can move forward for another step.
However
, the
country
can improve their laws to be stronger by using
problems
that cause
from
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tourists
In conclusion, many
country
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have international tourism
can
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offer benefits of significant income and
country
development.
However
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it can create some following
problems
from cultural diversity and
different
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in laws
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Revenue
  • Accommodation
  • Cultural exchange
  • Infrastructure
  • Pollution
  • Erosion
  • Overcrowding
  • Economic dependency
  • Global events
  • Sustainable tourism
  • Mutual understanding
  • Strain on natural resources
  • Foot traffic
  • Local traditions and customs
  • Cultural awareness
  • Vulnerable
  • Pandemics
  • Political instability
  • Residue
  • Host country
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