Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, many
people
all over the world are most likely to work from their home, and most
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decide to give an education to their
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by
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them study from their home because
technology
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that they
use
for communication become
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cheaper and
more
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easier to
use
than before. From my point of view,
technology
makes life
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easier than before.
Technology
has
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significant
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developed in
past
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two decades,
people
can see each other
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or communicate with their
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even
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in
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side of the world by using Facetime application,
people
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can learn things in
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of
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Youtube, all these activities have
technology
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to playing as an important role. I personally think that these technologies can be both positive and negative development. On the one hand,
technogy
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technology
can be extremely beneficial. As it can be seen that
people
are now
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to
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their friends or their colleges easier by using chat programs or video calls programs.
Moreover
,
people
can
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from home more easily because they
use
these technologies
for
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recieve their
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, do it on
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, and send them through
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.
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the other hand,
technology
can be
problems
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. As
people
can addicted to them by using them all day long, and forgot things around them in
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real
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world
such
as children playing online games for days and did not have
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diet or
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not
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the important role, do their work or their study. In conclusion,
technology
can be both positive and negative influences,
people
who can
use
it for their
benificials
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beneficial
and avoid to addicted
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their negative influences are
perfect
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guy
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that
other
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should admire.
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