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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think that this will lead to English becoming the only langusge to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?

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English has become a universal
language
 in the world nowadays. Some individuals believe that English will become the only
language
 to be used internationally. There are advantages and disadvantages of communicating in a single
language
 in the world. The details will be discussed below.
First
 and foremost, using
one
 single
language
 in the world may cause the loss of cultural diversity. The ancient people
made up
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 words, idioms and
slangs
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by
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 their living practice, culture and their history in the past. The original meaning of the wordings might be lost when the various types of
language
turned
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 into
one
language
.
For example
, the practice of using Traditional
Chinese
 is banned in Mainland China and the government recommended citizens
to
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use Simplified
Chinese
 as a replacement.
Chinese
 residents may forget the process of the creation of
Chinese
 words. Still, converting multiple languages into
one
 makes communication more efficient. Communication is important in different aspects of work, like business, healthcare and the public sector. Those jobs required specific skills and learning professional terms to deal with different issues. It will cause lots of misunderstanding when an individual is facing a
language
 which is not well known. Take the healthcare
settings
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 as an example, it is common to use unique abbreviations in the clinical area because it can minimize the
language
 barrier and optimize the confusion caused by different staff
with
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 various nationalities. Single
language
 helps people to avoid mistakes. To conclude, using
one
 single
language
 helps communication
become
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 more efficient. Still, it may cause the loss of cultural diversity.
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