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Much controversy surrounds the ongoing struggle over how governments can safely and effectively manage 'living with COVID' two years on from the initial outbreak.

#controversy #struggle #governments #covid #two #years #outbreak
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The biggest detrimental problem in the world is
current
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the current
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 outbreak of covid
lockdown
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 throughout many countries. Most
of
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the Governments are struggling to handle
this
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 situation. When there are no options to
control
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 the spreading of the active cases,
then
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 governments are forced to
opted
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 to go for a
lockdown
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 rather than find other alternative ways to
control
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 or
spreading
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spread
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 the cases. The authorities
needs
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need
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 to
control
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 the spreading out through other means,
as
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but as
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 a
nation
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 they are failing to do so. As a
last
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resort
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 they are forced to go for a
lockdown
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 to bring
under
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it under
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control
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. These
are
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lead to many economical and psychological consequences
to
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for
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 the nation as a whole. During the
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lockdown
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,lockdown
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 many working people need to work remotely from their homes. Students need to lean online till they lift the ban. Online learning brought down the quality of the education system. Many kids
they
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do not focus on online learning.
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 restricts a
child
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 social activity and
being mingle
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 with their school friends. A teacher cannot focus on many students at a time. When all are working from home, many businesses are losing their revenue. When losing income businesses are needed to cut down the number of employees from their entity to prevent
further
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loses
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losses
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. Those who lost their jobs already are finding
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it difficulty
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difficulty
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 to get another job. Jobless people are facing many issues even to manage their day to day living
cost
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costs
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. Some countries cannot go for a
lockdown
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 due to financial
detrimental
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.
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 will allow the economic level to drop
down
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drastically and the growth level dropped to a negative.
Lockdown
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 may
reduces
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 the spreading and bring down the death toll drastically but at the same time
facing
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 many financial
crisis
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crises
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on
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the social and economic. Authorities leant to live with the current situations and not
to
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restrict the economic activities of the nation by
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lockdown
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the lockdown
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. Should promote and make aware of the
needs
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need
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of
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for
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 vaccination.
At
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In
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 the current
situation
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 the vaccination can slow down the spreading and
control
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 the death rate. Institutions should educate the public to avoid mass
gathering
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gatherings
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, wear a mask
at
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in
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 the public and maintain social distancing.
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 will be
a
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an
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ongoing
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on going
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ongoing
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 problem and should find
a
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 best solution rather than going for a
lockdown
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 every time.
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