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The internet has made traditional libraries unnecessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Discuss giving examples from your own knowledge and experience.

#internet #libraries
According to some people,
libraries
 became less important these days because of
the
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technology. I am of the view that the internet has replaced the need
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libraries
 for all parts of society.
To begin
 with, online reading
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wide
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a wide
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 range of information
is
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short
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 period of time.
This
 is helpful for students specifically and researchers who need many types of scientific articles in their studies.
For instance
, the availability of multimedia structures from different videos, photos and data as well as encyclopedias make
study
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 process easier for all kinds of students.
Thus
, accomplishing more homework in
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 time.
Furthermore
, reading books online is more convenient for workers who need to spend
majority
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 of the day at
office
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. In fact, more than 50% of employees need to work
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 hours to make ends meet and to cover life expenses these days.
This
 result in reaching home at 8:00 pm daily with no energy to go out again for any reason.
Hence
,
internet
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 offers
valuable
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 chance to sit on
sofa
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the sofa
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 and enjoy reading from
e-book
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an e-book
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 with no worries of traffics and hassle that can pop out on the way to
library
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.
Finally
, reading online is considerably
cost effective
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 since numerous
of
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websites platforms display different kinds of books free of charge. Once the internet connection has been
payed
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, no extra cost is needed.
For example
,
application
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 like Storytel provides hundreds of books
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variety
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languages
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 and an option to hear the lines through
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 facility while walking or driving for free.
This
 ,in turn, saved a lot of money
might
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be spend
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in
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 library membership or
penalty
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 for
delay
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 or damage of materials when
borrow
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 them. In conclusion,
although
 many individuals may
favorites
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libraries
 to gain literature these days, I believe technology has made
libraries
 unneeded because of
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 of information provided, conveniences and
save
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of
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 budget.
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