Some people think that giving gifts and presents to friends and family is important to show them that we care. Others think that there are more important ways. Discuss both and give your opinion.

While some
people
think that giving gifts and presents to
friends
and family is important to
show
them that we
care
. Others think that there are better ways. From my point of view, I agree with the latter view and think that there are have many
opption
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option
options
to express good fell for
nearly
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people
Such
as skinship, talk and cook. In the following essay, the reasons to support my opinion will be discussed in detail. There are many ways to
show
about your
attendtion
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attention
to
friends
and family .
First
of all, skinship is simple
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to communicate
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communicate
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communication
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between
people
.
This
body langue can build strong
bornding
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bonding
branding
and make
people
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feel
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fell
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feel
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safe.
For example
, parent
hug
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their child before they go to school that
cheerfull
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cheerful
cheerfully
and give their love.
Second
,
talk
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talking
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can help you more understand each other. When you talk with your family or your
friends
that
mean
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means
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you pay attention to them.
Finally
, Cook food for someone you love which is their
favorite
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food or share
you
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your
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recipe
to
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with
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them that
make
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makes
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them know your
care
.
Moreover
, If you share your activities with your buddy or your family will give relationship
among
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with
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your
people
. Some
people
might believe that
givin
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giving
given
gifts and presents to
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partner
partners
paertner
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a paertner
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and family are easy to
show
about your
attendtion
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attention
.
For instance
, we sent presents to
wedding
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the wedding
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couple.
However
,
some
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in some
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situation
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situations
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pressent
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present
can not express your sincerity.
For example
,
Grand
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Grandparent
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parent
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parents
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do not need expensive things from their family.but they need
spend
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to spend
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their time with their family member. So, I personally think that
give
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giving
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present
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a present
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is not the better way to
show
how about
care
. In conclusion,
although
people
can
show
how they
care
about their
friends
and their family by
give
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giving
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presents
for
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to
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them, I strongly believe that skinship,
talk
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talking
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and
cook
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cooking
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are the important way to
show
which is
care
about your
nearly
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near
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people
.
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  • Affection
  • Materialism
  • Cultural traditions
  • Impact
  • Relationships
  • Quality time
  • Acts of service
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  • Shared experiences
  • Equating
  • Emotional presence
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