Some people feel that public money should not be spent on cultural amenities such as museums, theatres and art festivals. How important do you think these things are to society as a whole? Are there any areas which are more important for the government to fund?
Devoting
budget
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a budget
on
artistic facilities has been a well-discussed topic and some individuals think that should not pay public Change preposition
to
fund
for cultural Fix the agreement mistake
funds
services
such
as art
campaigns, museums and cinemas. This
essay will explain two importance of these things to society and say imperative places for the government
to fund
.
Nowadays, people
pay more attention to artistic events and places. In addition
, art
become more imperative for them. Firstly
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been answered
since
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as
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where
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people
participate artistic festivals and encourage each other to respect their cultural costume
. Due to superb museums Fix the agreement mistake
costumes
such
as louvre
, many Correct article usage
the louvre
people
from all around go there and it leads to having more income from cultural services
for the government
. Secondly
, art
amenities would fresh individual’s mind
and if they paid attention Fix the agreement mistake
minds
on
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to
art
festivals and maintained their identity, they would feel jolly. For example
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types are really popular and citizens prefer to participate Change the noun form
entertainment
art
festivals. Change preposition
in art
As a result
, cultural amenities would important for individuals in
somewhere and devoting public Change preposition
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fund
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funds
for
that, is essential.
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However
, there some
imperative areas for the Add a missing verb
are some
government
to determine budget
for that. Add an article
the budget
a budget
For example
in India individuals need more medical places ,clinics and hospitals. So, it would better
for authorities to Add a missing verb
be better
fund
medical facilities instead
of art
amenities. On the other hand
, some people
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tolive
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below
blow
the poverty level Correct your spelling
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such
as Africans, in
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their
people
need more food budget
not
cultural Add the comma(s)
,not
services
. Consequently
, the government
determine more budget
for first
needs instead
of artistic services
.
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facilities would important
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be important
people
and the government
can devote public money for that but it depends on their region and situation.Submitted by TUTOO on
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