Some people feel that public money should not be spent on cultural amenities such as museums, theatres and art festivals. How important do you think these things are to society as a whole? Are there any areas which are more important for the government to fund?

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artistic facilities has been a well-discussed topic and some individuals think that should not pay public
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funds
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for cultural
services
such
as
art
campaigns, museums and cinemas.
This
essay will explain two importance of these things to society and say imperative places for the
government
to
fund
. Nowadays,
people
pay more attention to artistic events and places.
In addition
,
art
become more imperative for them.
Firstly
, in the modern world,
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need are more spiritually and physically needs have
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since
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France,
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there
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people
participate artistic festivals and encourage each other to respect their cultural
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. Due to superb museums
such
as
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, many
people
from all around go there and it leads to having more income from cultural
services
for the
government
.
Secondly
,
art
amenities would fresh individual’s
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and if they paid attention
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art
festivals and maintained their identity, they would feel jolly.
For example
in Iran, theatres or these
entertainments
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types are really popular and citizens prefer to participate
art
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in art
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festivals.
As a result
, cultural amenities would important for individuals
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somewhere and devoting public
fund
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funds
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for
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that, is essential.
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, there
some
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imperative areas for the
government
to determine
budget
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the budget
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for that.
For example
in India individuals need more medical places ,clinics and hospitals. So, it would
better
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be better
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for authorities to
fund
medical facilities
instead
of
art
amenities.
On the other hand
, some
people
live
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below
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blow
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below
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the poverty level
such
as Africans,
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there
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people
need more food
budget
not
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cultural
services
.
Consequently
, the
government
determine more
budget
for
first
needs
instead
of artistic
services
. In conclusion,
art
facilities would
important
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be important
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for
people
and the
government
can devote public money for that but it depends on their region and situation.
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